Writing week 5 tearm 1

Here is my published recount about our walk up Te Ahuahu

mountain. Lani and willow helped me edit it. I want you to notice that I used a adjective ,verbs and, adverbs.

Ohh! My gosh we are going for a walk up the mountain Te Ahuahu. Before we left we made sure everyone had all their drink bottles, their lunch and their noticing notebook.When we left, I went there. There so much people, that we had to go in groups. I went on the first group with my sister on the way there. beep beep!! off we go. We turn into the dusty road, as the bus driver turns the dust fills up the window.  When I walked up it was a dusty evil-smelling mounting.

Wow!!! “We are finally here that didn't take long” I shouted to Heidi. When we went up the hill I was so proud of myself I kept taking breaks as my mouth filled up with air I finally swallowed it I felt exhausted and hungry the way up. It was happy that it was a bit windy because  we wouldn’t get so hot and sweaty on our way up. When we were at the top it was such a beautiful view up on the hill It was like a big forest.

After lunch we walked all the way down me and mrs B were the last to get down the mountain all the juniors went first on the bus they hop off the bus and it was about 1:30.

I never want to climb up that mountain again I would only climb that mountain if they pay me. I felt annoyed because  the crickets made Tylah and me angry.

Brooom brooom brooom suddenly a big black pitch-dark car drove by. The car door opened and Matua Ken and a guy with lots of Maori tattoos came out.